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The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime. Why do you think that is? Do you think the news should be a balance of both good and bad news?

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Nowadays, there are too many issues around the world
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 are shown by TV or social media and most of them are negative. In my opinion, individuals have been facing different kinds of difficulties
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 as global warming, poverty, crime and etc.
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, all reporters try to convey to the public
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 problems.
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, I believe that all
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 ought to be shown both positive and negative because it could help to have a well-balanced atmosphere in many ways.
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, some people’s reactions are unpredictable to negative
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 which they watch via social media.
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, people are more susceptible to watching bad
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 than good
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.
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, reporters are always trying to avoid filming positive statements because some of them claim that
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 could be boring and non-efficient to the public.
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, there are several benefits to
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 detrimental
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 to the population;
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 is that people will be more informed about
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the environment
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,
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 is that these issues could lead
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 human beings to fight
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poverty and subsidize financially some other spheres as well.
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, there are tons of
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 around the world which releases
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 but only negative
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 could spread extremely fast. Unfortunately, the impact of bad
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to
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the
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society
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 dreadful which in turn bring lots of depression and stress to the population.
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, the government officials ought to overlook
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these
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 negative
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 and set up some rules where it will be written that all good and bad
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 will be conveyed equally in order to keep society calm.
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, If individuals know
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 amount of detrimental
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, they could be more depressed and even some could commit suicide. To summarize, these days, there
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 too
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much
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 bad
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 are being reported by the officials. In my opinion,
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contradict
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news
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 spread easier and faster than good
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.
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, it is believed that all kinds of
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 ought to be reported equally in order to have a well-balanced atmosphere around the public.
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