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It is important for children to learn how to distinguish between right and wrong by carryingout punishments.Do you agree or disagree with this?

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It is commonly argued that the advantages exceed drawbacks of teaching
children
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 of difference between
right
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 and Wong at an early
age
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, learning the distinction only be achieved by applying punishment. From my respective, it is sometimes difficult to teach
children
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 with specific terms or conditions,
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, learning the difference at an early
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 can prohibit any permanent harm on them or others. Writing a
reflection
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letter
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 can be one of the punishments for parents and teachers. One of the drawbacks of teaching
kids
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 at an early
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 is that they are too young to understand some circumstances, including rape and kill.
Children
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 may not understand the concept of raping or killing thoroughly when they are two to
five-years-old
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, it is not efficient for teaching them in
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 situations which they do not encounter and it is too complicated for them.
On the other hand
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, teaching
children
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 at an early
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 can prevent them from habituating to doing wrong. When
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perform
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preform
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 badly and it becomes their habit, it is difficult for them to correct it.
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, a boy steals things from others. He can earn money or
foods
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 from
this
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 action, he will continue
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 action since he can benefit
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from
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form
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 it. We should
teaching
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 them the problem and consequences of stealing things for the boy.
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, we can prevent it from happening.
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, teaching them at an early
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 prevent them from causing
permanent
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a permanent
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 effect on them or
other
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others
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. As mentioned,
kids
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 may lack
of
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knowledge and
sense
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a sense
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 of
wrong
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the wrong
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thing
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things
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.
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, they may fight for a toy. It may cause any permanent
harms
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on
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other
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, teaching them earlier would prohibit it
happening
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from happening
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. Writing
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reflection
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letter
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 would be the top priority of punishment since it is gentle and allow
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 to reflect
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 he did. It is believed that understanding the consequence of doing wrong can be a good approach for
allow
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 them to act good behaviour. By writing
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,
kids
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 are allowed to think
throughly
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thoroughly
 to distinguish the good and bad and
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 understand the
serious
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 of bad behaviours. To conclude,
children
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 learning how to distinguish between right and wrong at an early
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age
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ago
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 can reduce the risk of getting hurt.
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, writing
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reflection
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letter
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 is a good approach for
teach
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 good behaviour to
children
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