People nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people around them?
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To begin
with, “sleep less, be more productive!”- famous Linking Words
people
claim almost in every single taken interview of them, imposing to us as sleeping takes “too much time” and saying that “Use synonyms
instead
of sleeping you would commit a feat”. Since these days Linking Words
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occurrence leads to a diverse effect on the Linking Words
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’s decision-making process . To illustrate it with my own example, I would say that time to time I get exposed by the rant of famous busenessmen who claim that in their 14-yeared career they could afford to have only 2 weeks of rest. To be honest, Use synonyms
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kinds of speeches make me belittle my merits and make me feel as I live my life in vain.
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Moreover
, the recent pandemic situation has just opened up the doors to the accelerated switch to the online or meta-Universe, where you do not need to be in conatct with real Linking Words
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as: diabetes, heart stroke, mental disorders, psychological issues. Linking Words
For instance
, getting used to be online 24/7 pushes Linking Words
people
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people
sleep less. In turn, Use synonyms
people
get irritated, disgruntled , and closed to the society. Under these circumstances, a person ruins relationships with Use synonyms
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To sum up
, I hope that we, humans, will be more conscious about our healthcare routine, knowing that sleep deprivation is not a natural process for bio-organisms. Sleep is a rest for our sophisticated organismal function from the over-pressure and is considered to be a vital process. Linking Words
In addition
, without sleep our activity during the day-light will be much lowered and our body, an organism in aggregate, will not be able to maintain viability.Linking Words
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