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International travel has become more affordable and many countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

As the affordability of the international
travels
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travel
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 has increased, the states are trying to appeal to a larger host of
travelers’
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 day by day.
This
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 essay will examine the upsides and downsides of that tendency. One evident advantage of
tourism
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 is
contribution
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 to economic development. Tourists spend money on a wide range of services, including hotels, amusements, shops, restaurants, food and medical amenities.
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,
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry yields a great sum of money that boosts the economy of the country. Another benefit worth mentioning is that
tourism
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 can contribute to the conservation of
touristic
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tourist
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 sites. To elaborate, foreigners tend to visit historical places,
landscapes
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and landscapes
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, particularly the landmarks of the country and these landmarks can be in the form of churches, mosques, cathedrals, monuments, etc. So
that
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 government’s utmost priority becomes carrying out regular maintenance of
such
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 sites in order for the
tourism
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 industry to flourish.
On the other hand
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,
inspite
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in spite
 of myriad beneficial aspects, there are a number of downsides as well. One of the most observed
factor
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 is
non-compliance
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the non-compliance
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 of tourists. Sometimes, they do not conform
with
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 the certain standards of the locals and respect their traditions. Racist remarks by tourists,
socioeconomic
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and socioeconomic
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 gaps between them and natives can
further
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 exacerbate
this
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 issue and provoke a public outcry. The other drawback of
tourism
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 is
unequal
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 infrastructure growth of different regions.
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 to say, governments are likely to focus on the development of tourist hotspots and most-visited destinations rather than other districts which desperately require renovations. In that case, those places in inadequate conditions are constantly neglected which can trigger more serious social issues.
To sum up
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,
although
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 there
are
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 a whole range of benefits
gotten
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from
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tourism
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the tourism
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 sector, some possible cons cannot be understated. From my perspective, governments should be mindful
about
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of
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 the income generated from
tourism
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 in order for the whole country to progress equally and impose certain regulations to deter the incoming foreigners from mocking the natives, disturbing them by not
honoring
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 their cultures.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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