Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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how people are living.

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have

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forgotten the purpose brought about by tradition or sacred festivals.

Hoewever

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However

,during celebration periods,

community

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currently want to have fun solely.In my view,

this

is a grey area that

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disagree with that

festive

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season

have not been put on the front line.

Firstly

,

festive

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season

is a period to enjoy through entertainments,buying and receiving gifts

such

that the society spend funds which were not planned for to make the

season

meaningful.To illustrate more,

peole

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people

travel

long

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distance

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to worship together with senior citizens

thereafter

,they go ahead to

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a goat and have some drinks.

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research done by homecare in 2000 shows that 60% of festivity take place in rural areas.

Therefore

,end of year

celebration

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celebrations

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are imperative in uniting family and every person has a reason to celebrate the

season

.

Secondly

,

bad

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economic time has facilitated

family

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to utilize the little funds on their small unit.

Inaddition

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,

need

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to cater for basic

need

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has forced many

parent

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to be on duty during the period others are having fun.

Moreover

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technology is very significant in the modern era

such

that they would rather spend the day watching movies than uniting with other people for entertainment.

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,in 2021 the star newspapers indicated that 60% of

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spend festivity praying video games.

Therefore

,it is due to many responsibilities that

has

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overtaken the

season

of being together with acquaintances

to

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apply

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partly. To sum up,holidays are fundamental in the world and meaningful that they create memory due to many activities that take place

however

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,technology and many

responsibility

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has

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facilitaed

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facilitated

many to do it on their own.