Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

Today the
competition
in finding a job between the younger and the older is becoming more popular.
This
essay will
first
discuss the
problems
associated with
this
phenomenon which are health issues and an economic crisis, and
then
suggest the most effective solutions which are handling the depression and providing enough career's opportunities for everyone. One problem related to the higher
competition
is mental health
problems
. Whoever cannot achieve the career
competition
several times feel lost and disappointed. They think that they are not fit in anywhere and look down on themselves.
This
type of
feelings
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make them depressed and those who cannot handle well have to face a depression disorder in the future. Another problem is that the
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of
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unemployment rate leads to
the
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terrible economic situation. Without jobs, it is impossible for
people
to earn money.
As a result
, they spend only
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those fundamental needs.
For example
, in the past two
years
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a quarter of new graduates in Bangkok were jobless and
this
led to a significant downward trend in
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economy. The
first
solution is to educate
people
to deal with their sadness. Everyone should accept the fact that even though they give whatever they got, sometimes they cannot get whatever they need. It is normal to be grieving for the failure but you have to handle it because life goes on.
Secondly
, the government should increase career's opportunities for everyone. The more available job's
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, the
less
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people
have to be unemployed.
Therefore
,
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must be taken in order to overcome
this
problem.
For instance
,
last
year when
Korean
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government made a policy to double the number of skilled
labors
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, the jobless rate fell dramatically. In conclusion,
people
face
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health
problems
and the economic crisis are the most serious
problems
due to the
competition
of job's seeking, and the essential solutions are to teach them to handle their sadness and provide enough work opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Unfulfilling job
  • Mental health
  • Physical health
  • Financial stability
  • Job security
  • Societal norms
  • Career choices
  • Pursuing passion
  • Practicality
  • Personal growth
  • Skill development
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Work-life balance
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