Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that working in
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in
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their
free
time
would be beneficial for
teenagers
and should be unpaid as they are doing
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social
work
. There are some merits and demerits, but I think there are more disadvantages
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to advantages. On the one side, there are
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advantages for
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teenagers
like
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a chance to understand
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different cultures, getting
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recognization from the
community
. From the
community
side hiring
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volunteers will help them to save
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money.
For instance
, 6
school boys
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from Tilak
school
were given
a
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opportunity to help the blind
people
whenever they get
a
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free
time
they can go to
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school
. If they help the blind
people
,
school
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will provide the certificates to the boys. Because of
this
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got benefited from those boys. On the other side, from
teenagers
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a teenagers
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perspective, getting unpaid for
community
work
would be demotivating.
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, they will
work
for
less
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hours which will not help either
of
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the communities or the
teenagers
. One of the recent
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, I saw was the students from the Little flower
school
, where they had
given
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a task by the
school
to clean the road twice a week. The main idea for
this
was the
teenagers
were getting lots of free
time
and they could spend a
few
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time
would help the
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near by
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people
and the
school
. But the
teenagers
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ere
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not happy because
school
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didn't provide any
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stipend
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nor
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prize.
Teenagers
weren't coming for the
work
and
hence
this
decision was taken backed by the
school
.
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the end, if any sort of prize or
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stripe
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is provided to the
teenagers
it will give them
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to do
work
and it might be beneficial for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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