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Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe it is best to travel by bicycle. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #travel #city #car #bicycle
Some
citizen
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citizens
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 have
a
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the
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opition
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option
 that
best
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the best
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 way to
travel
 within the
city
 limits is by automobile.While others
beilve
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believe
 that
traveing
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travelling
 by
bicycle
 is a better way. We will discuss both the mode of
transpotation
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transportation
 in
details
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detail
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.I strongly believe that cars
is
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are
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 the best to
travel
 within the
city
boundries
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boundaries
. On the one
hand
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,hand
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 motorized vehicle can cover a lot of distance in small
amout
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amount
 of
time
 and can be less
exsuting
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exciting
 to
travel
 by .The one
challege
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challenge
 I feel is that due to traffic congestion in the
city
 the
travel
time
 within the can increases
expotential
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exponential
. But
this
 can be avoided by
traveling
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travelling
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 in
non peak
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non-peak
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 hours.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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workplace
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the workplace
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are
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is
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 more flexible with
thier
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their
 work
time
 and
empolyee
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employee
 has a choice to reach
office
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the office
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 at
thier
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their
covinent
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convenient
time
 .
For
example
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,example
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 in our
office
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,office
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 my
collegues
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colleagues
 and I
usally
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usually
 used to
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carpool
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car pool
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carpool
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 together after 12 pm by which
majority
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the majority
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 of traffic density was gone and we reach
office
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the office
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 within 1
hours
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hour
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. Cars are
more
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a more
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 comfortable option to
travel
 with at any
time
 of the day irrespective of what
time
 of the day it is.
On the other
hand
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,hand
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although
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 is better for health but
is
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it
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is
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apply
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very
exusting
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exciting
exhausting
 to
travel
 by , it will take a huge amount of
time
 to reach our destination .
Sometime
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Sometimes
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 if someone wants to reach and attend some important meeting
traveling
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travelling
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from
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by
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 can make them sweaty ,which won't
we
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be
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 appropriate for
such
 events.
However
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,However
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 cycle can have an advantage only when you need to
travel
 to a smaller distance.In
this
case
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,case
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 pollution caused by
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an individual
the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 is less
signifincant
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significant
.
Travling
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Travelling
 by
bicycle
 can be
risks
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risk
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 during
night
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the night
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 since
lack
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the lack
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 of
of
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apply
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natutal
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natural
 sunlight.
Although
amount
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the amount
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 of pollution
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caused
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cause
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caused
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 by
bicycle
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bicycles
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 is negligible
but
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apply
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the best way to
travel
 within
a
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apply
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city
 limits is by
cars
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car
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 which is more
time
 saving , comfortable and
convinent
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convenient
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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