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with the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources . To what extent do you agree?

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coat and smoke are the most important and primary needs for any transportation which takes place within the country or outside the locality. These days due to the increasing global demand for oil and vapour the areas which are not yet discovered should be opened up as well as should allow accessing the
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the aspects of oil as well as gas and its operational uses.
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, the population is on a high growth rate and which gives rise to the increasing demand for vehicles,let it be the two-wheelers or four-wheelers,so the demand increases for the vehicles and gives rise to the usage of
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resources
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.According to a survey in
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,on the other and some surveys state that oil and gas will come at a scarcity stage.
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,we can't believe in the scarcity aspect rather should take care over usage of cars and other means of transportation or using totally electric or solar means of transport to save the
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 for the country or else for the entire globe.
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, I would like to state that in the growing economy in
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,we just can save some of them.Rather,the government
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 the province should allow the concerned people and should try to open the areas for the public in use
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 of creating any kind of artificial scarcity in the entire globe for
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 with effect to use the other means which are been discovered in the place of oil-consuming vehicles.One
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 for more usage the undiscovered places should come into effect. In the conclusion, I would agree upon the concept of discovering the places which are not yet discovered as well as should be given in use with the phases and protecting other means simultaneously.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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