1. With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a nu mber of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that exposure to
internet
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and digital platforms can put the
life
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of
children
at risk.So,it is suggested that parents should allow controlled
access
to
such
platforms.I completely agree that young minds are rotted by these booming digital advancements,and
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strategic parental control can reduce the risk.
This
essay deliberates my viewpoint on how
children
are vulnerable to the open internet peril, and my considerations on why adults should limit the usage.
First
of all,
children
are exposed to
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situation
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in front of
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.It is an undeniable fact that social media is an open gateway for strangers to sneak into childrens’
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.
For example
, without knowing
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identity of the online-masked person,
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kids add them to their
friends
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list just to increase the number.Evidently,there are many scenarios in
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which
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warns
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incidences of
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abuse.
Additionally
,the media contents are not age-specific as there is no limitation on the information,regardless of any given topic.Kids,especially under-18 are not
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enough to perceive
this
open information which can effectively corrupt the tender minds.Resultingly,the exposed kids, perhaps involve in anti-social behaviour like vaping,consuming alcohol to name a few.But,how do we distance our
children
from these threats? Adults should take the responsibility of providing limited
access
. The provision of parental
access
by various apps
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the purpose of containing
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for
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audience.When elder family members
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,they can be alerted with the type of website visits and amount of time logged on.
Thus
,any unknown stranger communication can be easily identified.
For instance
,when we turn the parental control on the setting of a desktop or a laptop is kept on,any links to a restricted video would need the permission of
matured
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adult at home.So,adult-controlled
access
is vital. In conclusion,
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the liberated viewing of digital media sites can dangerously put
children
at risk.
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Therefore
,it is paramount to limit adult-controlled usage to prevent the hassle of
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and the like.
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