In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, with

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we can buy clothes, work at

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, and communicate around the world without contact.

This

development

has two sides. One good side, and a

second

negative side. Personally, I think the lifestyle of

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modern

society

is a good

development

First

of all, the

development

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modern

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good for

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economic health. Because many countries need international trade to level up their economies.

For example

, China's economy is good because it is the industrial

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of the world and other countries buy products from it.

On the other hand

, the current technological

development

is very useful for working. Indeed, a computer today can allow you to work remotely by videoconference.

This

was very useful during the recent Covid pandemic. Because a lot of people had to work from home.

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, these positive sides

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international trade allows the whole world to have what it wants, but it creates pollution. Because the travel by boat, plane, or truck to deliver the products emit carbon dioxide.

Secondly

, it is less visible, but

internet

consumption

also

pollutes. When the network is overloaded,

for example

during the covid pandemic, the data

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consume more electricity and pollute more. But

also

, when the

internet

network is overloaded, it can fail and cause big problems because

society

depends on it in some way today. To conclude, the recent

development

in our

society

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side, because it permits the

development

of countries. But it has

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limited, and we need to use

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more intelligently.

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In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and communicate via the Internet without face-to-face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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