You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visits you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

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dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my
last
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visit to the local swimming
pool
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and to make suggestions to remedy
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new phenomenon. I have been using the
pool
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for more or less six years. It is, in fact, one of my favourite relaxing spots.
to begin
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with the issue, I have never seen the swimming
pool
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dirty until
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week which I decided to invite my friends to have some relaxing time with me in your
pool
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.
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, what extremely surprised me was the rude attitude of some of your staff that day. The main problem with that dirtiness was beside the
pool
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.
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of all, there was a limitation of seats which made us lie on the ground which was covered with body oil.
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, what bothered me the most was that when I asked the staff to send someone to clean the spot they even did not look at me let alone answer my request. Anyway, I would like to offer some suggestions to curb
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issue.
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and foremost, the staff should be trained how to provide better service to customers. If it is possible,
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the supervising system out to improve. The
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recommendation is to check the quality and purify the water and clean the
pool
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daily,
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not only benefits your level of customer service but
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create a better atmosphere for users.
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is all I would like to share with you. Thank you for taking the time to read
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letter. yours faithfully,
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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