Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; other say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowdays
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, travelling is the most
priceful
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prideful
peaceful
experience
that we can enjoy
by
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alone and with loved one's. We can capture beautiful moments and explore the different
culture
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cultures
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, traditions and
language
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languages
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of other
countries
. Some
people
think that travelling is
the
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wonderful
experience
but some
thinks
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that is
the
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a
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wastage of time and money. But according to
me
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my
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travelling is the most precious
experience
to capture. To initiate with, travelling is the most valuable and knowledgeable
experience
. We get a chance to learn about different
countries
there rules and regulations,
there
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traditions. We can look over
there
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their
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dressings that how they dress ,
there
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language.
Moreover
, we can collect our memories , beauty of nature. As in today's
world
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,world
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person life is too busy and boring with their work and if they do not travel and explore new things . They will only be
trap
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trapped
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in their work .
For instance
, some
people
are stressed and have
a
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depression and if they went to travelling they feel
relex
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relax
relaxed
and comfortable by the beauty of world and
people
.
On the other hand
, some
people
think
that is
the
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a
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wastage of time and money. Because they think that if they went outside for travelling their company sales and there work will be on loss.
Furthermore
, some
people
are not financially good they don't have more money to travel and explore the different
countries
beacuse
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because
travelling costs a lot like flights tickets, hotels tickets and many more things . so that's why they think that travelling is not worth it for them. In
comculsion
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conclusion
compulsion
, I think that travelling is the most valuable
experience
one will get.
Beacuse
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Because
we get
relax
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to relax
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and away from our daily routine .
Also
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we got
a
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knowledge of other
countries
and away from
stressful
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the stressful
a stressful
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life.
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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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