Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sports
gives more enthusiasm and energy to people who are engaged in
sports
activities.
However
, some believe that natural skill is required to become
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success
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in
sports
activities while others say that hard
work
and
practice
is
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utmost significance.
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, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, natural
ability
is necessary to be
acheive
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achieve
in a game because
this
kind of
talent
gave
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from
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God so they can show
to
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theirs'
ability
and
talent
extremely.
For example
, the
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Football
player
Mr Mersie, he has a unique
ability
in order to he is being a successful
player
to around the world.
Hence
, if a person will be achieved in a game, it must require any natural skill.
On the other hand
, hard
work
and
practice
is
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the
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vital for
success
in
sports
; anyone can
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in
sports
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field without any unique natural
talent
.
For example
, a legend Indian cricket
player
Mr Sachin
tendulkar
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,
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has had been putting a lot of effort since his's childhood period to enter in
Indian
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team and he was a very normal person when before entering the team. Hard
work
never fails with
continues
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training gives more
success
.
Therefore
, if a person wants to
success
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in any physical activity, he should do more
practice
and hard
work
,
thus
, he would become a famous
player
to
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around the world undoubtedly. To conclude, physical activity provides more benefits to people in
various
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way
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; natural
ability
is required for being successful
games
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. Hard
work
and
practice
can provide more
talent
by learning. In my opinion, about
this
, hard
work
and
practice
is the most important aspect for being
success
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physical activities. I hope
this
process is conducive to making many
sports
players.
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