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Some people say that the best way to teach children to behave well is to punish them. Others argue that rewarding and praising children is a better way to teach them the difference between right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A
children
 background is depending on their
parents
 and friends.
Furthermore
, their rearing is depending on their living environment not only
home
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their home
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 environment but
also
school
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their school
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 environment.
Firstly
,
majority
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the majority
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 of
children
imitating
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imitate
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 their
parents
 in their classes, so that teachers are able to see what is the
behavior
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behaviour
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 of his/her
parents
.
On the other hand
, most
of
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apply
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kids
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the kids
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 duplicate their parent’s
action
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actions
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 in their classes.
Therefore
,
parents
 have to try to be
a
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the
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 right person at home at least.
For example
, two little girls had
argument
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an argument
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, one of them just hit another one in order to keep her mind.
girl
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the girl
a girl
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 who is hitting another one is doing
same
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the same
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 action which her
parents
 or friends did. In
this
 case, the
parents
 or a teacher do not need to scold her directly
instead
 of
this
, perhaps they can explain
a
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the
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 risks of hitting somebody.
Secondly
,
the
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apply
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punishing someone is
old
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an old
the old
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 way to teach something, might be human being used these methods in the 19th century. In
modern
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the modern
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 world, we should talk about peace and unity.
Father
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Fathers
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 and mothers try to reward or praise their kids as
many
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much
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 as possible. It is
really
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a really
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 wrong action that if
parents
 did some abuse to their
children
. Because when they grew up, exactly they will follow their
parents
 and abuse his/
her
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their
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children
 again. Indeed, punishment is not
solution
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a solution
the solution
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 for
children
background
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backgrounds
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. In my opinion,
parents
 have to support their
children
 in all ways. I believe that successful person inspired by their
parents
 when they were kids.
Parents
 gave them
dream
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to dream
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 and passion from
their
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an
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 early
ages
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age
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.
Finally
, I strongly believe that
parents
 should teach
them
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the
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difference
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the difference
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 between right and wrong so that
children
 can be
a
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apply
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good
mother
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mothers
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 and good daddy.
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