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Some people think that it is a good idea for aprents to help their children with their homework. Other believe that children should do their homework on their own. Disucss both views and give your opinion.

#people #idea #aprents #children #homework #disucss
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I am going to discuss both views before I state my opinion. I will state reasons
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why
children
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 should and should not do their homework with and without their
parents
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' help. I will
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 draw my conclusion with reasons from my perspective.
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 I will talk about why
students
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 should do independent work.
Students
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 would always be taught to be independent and to not rely on anyone to help them at their lowest or in a situation.
Students
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 can benefit from learning by themselves because that will help them in the
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 run when they have a test or quiz and
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 need to study alone.
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 will learn subjects faster if they start using methods on easier ways to learn independently.
Students
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 should get help from their
parents
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 for many reasons. The
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 reason is that
students
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 tend to rush on homework and try to complete their work fast in order to have “free time” which includes playing video games or playing with their friends.
Parents
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 should make sure that their
children
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 are learning at their best and should always keep track of their studies.
Parents
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 should always be able to help their
children
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 when they do not understand a problem or two. To recapitulate, I think that getting help from your
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 and doing your work by yourself is balanced and perfect.
Parents
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 should help their
children
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 sometimes, but
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 encourage them to try as hard as they can to learn the solutions, formulas, or directions by themselves.
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 can create a balanced way of learning and education.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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