Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
argue that affluence and
success
are mostly achieved by good fortune
instead
of hard work. In my opinion, I do not agree with
this
point of view.
Firstly
, achievement and
success
belong to those who work hard. It is undeniable that Rome was not built in one day and
people
could not become proficient at something after one night. In order to accomplish any goals,
people
need to make a lot of efforts that require sufficient
trainings
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and practice.
As a result
,
people
could make it to the top due to their determination to practice. A good example
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this
is Lan Lang, a renowned pianist, he was not born as a prodigy of music.
Instead
, he is just an ordinary kid and what he has is his passion for piano. It is said that he spent approximately five hours daily
to practice
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piano lessons ranging from scales, chords, tempos, and so on. For
this
reason, he is now one of the most distinguished
pianist
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in the world.
Secondly
, orientation contributes to a person’s attainment. The reason for
this
is
because
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whenever
people
start to set a particular goal, they need to set a clear plan on how they are going to go.
In addition
, a good orientation might accelerate
higher
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a higher
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chance of
success
due to
the
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clear guidance.
For instance
, a student applying for the
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scholarship
needs to know which school he is going to study and the school’s requirements. By setting a clear plan, it is very helpful for him to prepare and gradually achieve his target. In conclusion, personal goals are only attained by the will to try hard as well as the clear orientation.
Therefore
, I believe
success
does not mostly go with luck.
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  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
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