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Your internet connection has recently been slow and unreliable.Write a letter to your internet service provider to complain. In the letter: -Describe the problem and why you are unhappy -Arrange for an engineer to visit your home -Request a reduction in your bill

#internet #connection #service #provider #-describe #-arrange #engineer #visit #home #-request #reduction #bill
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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding the internet
connection
 installed by your company staff.
From
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last
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the last
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 few
days
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 I
am
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have been
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 experiencing slow and unreliable internet
connection
 in my home. The problem is that
speed
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the speed
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 of
net
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the net
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connection
 is unreliable, and it really
become
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becomes
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 slow when I need
connection
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a connection
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in
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at
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 full speed. Sometimes it
is getting
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gets
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 disconnected automatically and it
is
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does
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 not
restarting
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restart
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 again.
Therefore
, I am requesting you to please arrange an engineer visit to my home, who can check the causes of slow speed and unreliability of
connection
. Please make sure the engineer
visit
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visits
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 in
evening
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the evening
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 time so that I can explain
him
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to him
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 the problems faced
by
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me
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apply
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so far. If possible please provide
rebate
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a rebate
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 on
final
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the final
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 bill
of
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this
 month because the
connection
 is not working as per expectation of mine. Hope, you will act on my request soon and looking forward to an early reply. Yours Faithfully, Tim Norton
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that transitions between ideas are smooth to enhance the logical flow. For instance, consider connecting the issues with the internet speed and disconnection more clearly.
task achievement
Be more specific about the time for the engineer visit to avoid ambiguity. Specifying 'after 6 PM' or 'between 6 PM and 8 PM' can make the request clearer.
general
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and word choices to enhance clarity and professionalism. For example: 'From the last few days' should be 'For the last few days'.
task achievement
The letter addresses all the required points: describing the problem, requesting an engineer visit, and asking for a reduction in the bill.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end, which contributes to its overall coherence.
coherence cohesion
The closing statement is polite and appropriately requests prompt action.
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