Write an essay presenting the pros and cons of teenagers owning mobile phones

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mobile
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they’re bad and good sides.Young boys and girls think smartphones are good for them and they
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live without them.When they’re on their smartphones they are zombies.
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is a bad thing u can social in
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way when u go out
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use my
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too much.with
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is so easy to find something to help you maybe find a girlfriend,find information for anything just write what u are searching for and boom you are ready for
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project or something.One advantage of having a mobile
phone
is that your parents and friends can always find you, when they need it, whereas without a mobile
phone
it is sometimes impossible. In my opinion, parents buy mobile
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for their children for safety.
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because if something happens to their children, they most probably will know about it. What
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more, mobile
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In my opinion, mobile
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but we should learn to control ourselves and it's not good when teenagers can't imagine their life without a mobile
phone
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Smartphones
  • Instant access
  • Educational apps
  • Enhanced communication
  • Navigation
  • Tech skills
  • Distraction
  • Productivity
  • Inappropriate content
  • Cyberbullying
  • Privacy concerns
  • Overreliance
  • Social skills
  • Double-edged sword
  • Responsibly
  • Mitigate
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