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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eat meat can cause serious health problems . Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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Some
people
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 get hold of the idea that
meat
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 should be substituted for
vegetables
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 in everyone's
diet
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, as it can cause health issues. I,
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, believe we should consume a balanced
diet
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 which includes both
meat
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 and
vegetables
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 to provide all essential nutrients for our body.
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, veggie food may not be suitable for those who suffer from indigestion.
Meat
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 contains fundamental proteins which are necessary for muscular growth, while vegetable dishes cannot provide them.
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, Branched Amino Acids, which are needed for muscle development are only present in
meat
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 dishes, and insufficient intake of them by vegetarians may result in muscular weakness.
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,
vegetables
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 are a good source of fibre which is
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 necessary for health maintenance. A food schedule without adequate green
vegetables
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 can cause constipation since fibre is required for normal bowel
habit
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 shows the importance of keeping a balanced
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 including both materials. Another issue with the recommendation of veggie diets to all individuals is that it can cause serious digestive problems in some of them, making it intolerable as it induces bloating and abdominal pain.
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,
people
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 who suffer from chronic inflammatory bowel diseases may experience severe stomach pain if they eat a plate of
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.
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, it is not a good choice for these
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 to use food containing only
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 item. To conclude, recommending a vegetarian
diet
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 to all
people
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 is not correct as it is deficient in some nutrients and cannot be tolerated by some.
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