Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Sound
is everywhere in daily life, from the path you way home, to the restaurant’s background
music
. Depending on the situation and the
time
, sounds can be gorgeous and make
people
delightful.
On the contrary
, it may cause some pressure
to
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mental health.
This
essay will discuss both sides and what can be accepted.
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human history,
music
has accompanied for a long
time
. At that
time
,
sound
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was originally to scare horrible
animal
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in order to prevent them hurt
people
. Till
the
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middle age,
music
had an immense advancement.
Propagandist
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and persist were utilized
music
to make
people
together.
Also
, many greatest masterpieces were developed at that
time
. It did alleviate anxiety and
bring
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peace to everyone.
Moreover
,
people
nowadays have
a diverse
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music
attributed to the internet. We can admire either ubiquitous or unique
music
. Distinctive
music
such
as aboriginal
music
can be seen easily and be heard wildly.
This
can convey that everyone can enjoy
a
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various
music
of background culture. In another hand, since the urban sprawl,
people
has
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been annoyed by some “noise” sounds. We can say that piano
sound
is elaborate
music
.
However
, if
this
kind of
sound
showed up
at
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middle
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night
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, you definitely not think that
this
is delicate.
Furthermore
,
these
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“wrong
time
music
may lead to some mental and physical health problems.
In addition
, I consider that noticeable
music
can mitigate pressure and bring coherence to everyone.
In
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the opposite, as long as the
music
not
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played
in
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an appropriate
time
or inaccurate place, it might
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some issues that really matter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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