teelevision is dangerous because it destorus family life and any sence of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the 21st century, almost every family has a television standing in the middle of their living room, sometimes even in some other rooms.
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leads to some
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unfortunate
consequences,
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as lost connections with family or friends. The reason for
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that they
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prefer
to stay at home, rather than
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out to socialise. In
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essay, I will give reasons why
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situation for the inhabitants. When the family does not like to watch the same things, people, in order to resolve
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issues started buying more and more devices, so as to make every member of the group satisfied.
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, they become separated from each other to peacefully see on the TV exactly what interests each of them them.
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, my friend's younger siblings that are twins, spend their
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leisure
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, which both of them have in their bedrooms.
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, they are not spending any minute together on playing, as well as developing their relations,
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the moments when they are fighting for
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access to the computer. Some might even say that they are like strangers to each other, cause the bond can not appear, and the humans who should have been the closest are not.
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, even when they are
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sitting together and watching TV no one is allowed to say something that will abstract others from the streaming because if someone does, others are rather hostile.
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, if the little kid comes back home, and he really
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to share
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day
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experiences with the rest of the community,
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will get punished with the killing sight from
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parents.
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, the children would have been scared to share with its thoughts another time, where the mom and dad would have been fulfilled with anger that their descendant is not
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talking
to them. To sum up,
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kind of device can be really harmful when it comes to
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up
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society. To avoid these situations some serious solutions should be suggested and
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implemented. As far as I am concerned, adults and
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young folks should be encouraged to
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as
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time as possible in front of the screens, to socialise.
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