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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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 is becoming more globalized and digitally advanced where the nation's developments are identical due to that people were able to purchase similar goods from almost anywhere. In my opinion,
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negative development on a country's tourism, culture and environmental health. Certain countries in the globe thrive from the tourism industry. In order to obtain a particular product which is traditionally made in a country, people tend to visit which may arise in their economy.
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 being available in every corner of the
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 may lead to devastating results on its economic growth.
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, foreign goods may lead to cultural deviance.
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, the manufacture of cotton clothing in Southeast Asian countries had to face a downfall in their production due to imported
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 in the market. Culturally, people living in those areas tend to wear cotton garments because of the country's weather conditions. Being influenced by foreign
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 they choose to wear clothes that are unfit for their climate.
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, the effects on the environment
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 of mass transportation of goods has taken a negative turn on weather conditions resulting in global warming. Transportation of these items throughout the
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 by air, sea and by means of road consumes massive amounts of fuels. In return, it emits more greenhouse gas causing unfavourable impacts on the environment. In conclusion, feasible
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 destroy poorer nations' culture and economic growth. In inclusion to that, the delivery of international items to the nook and corner of the
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 may raise global warming concerns
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 impacts countries development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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