Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or diagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

These days
traffic
is a pressing problem globally.Government seek to find out some solutions.One of the best ways is that
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the cost of petrol to control pollution and
traffic
.I totally agree with some examples. One of the major real plus
point
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of increasing the price of petrol is the fact that
people
become unwilling to use their own private car because they should allocate
the
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large amount of money for the fuel which
are
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needed for their
cars
,as
result
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they tend to use other
vichels
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vouchers
such
as bicycle,bus,train,subway and etc.
Finally
,the number of
cars
would be halved,but it is so important that if the
goverment
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government
want to do
this
plan,public transportation should be appropriate enough.It means that there should be modern,comfortable and frequent buses,taxies and so on.In
this
situation,
people
put public transportation ahead of
the
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private
cars
. If I want to find out some remedies for
traffic
,I should say
there
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a
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lot of approaches.
Firatly
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Firstly
,
people
should be taught that private
cars
are so
dangrous
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dangerous
for the
enviromnet
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environment
.
This
goal is reached by advertising and educating.
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Government
Goverment
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can design some billboards or
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a teaser
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teaser
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on tv for promoting
this
thought and
this
approach.
Furthermore
, children should learn
this
lifestyle when they are
in
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the
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low
ages
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.
likewise
, the tax on private
cars
should be increased.It can be useful,since
people
may have less
tendence
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tendency
to buy
car
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a car
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as well as it would be great that some bike stations would be located in every
streets
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, and they are readily
availabe
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available
for
people
. In conclusion,
traffic
and pollution pose a threat
for
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human life,so both
people
and
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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are responsible for solving
this
problem.There are several helpful ideas
such
as increasing the price of petrol and tax on private
cars
,
also
people
should change the pattern of
life style
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lifestyle
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and follow the new instructions.
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