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Many people believe that living a city life offers greater benefits as compared to the countryside? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #city #life #countryside
In
this
 cutting-edged era, people prefer to live in cities;
as a result
, they are migrating from
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the village
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village
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. A huge number of folks say that city life renders more advantages in comparison with rural life. In my perspective, it entirely relies on interests and choices.
This
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. On the one hand, there are several benefits to living in urban areas.
Firstly
,
this
 location has
well-good
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the well-good
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 quality of educational
instituations
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institutions
; many parents like to study
to
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for
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 theirs' kids in
these kind
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 of facilities available
schools
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in schools
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; these have only in urban places rather than rural.
Moreover
,
ultra modern
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 amenities are available in cities
such
 as cinema for entertainment
purpose
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 and shopping
mall
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 for purchasing;
In addition
, a lot of employment opportunities are
availble
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available
 only in
urban
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an urban
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location
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 that's why people
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 tremendously.
For example
, a report indicates more than 50% of the population are living in
metropolitican
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metropolitan
 venues.
On the other hand
, there are numerous advantages of living in
village
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the village
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.
Firstly
, a person can eat food without
pestisides
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pesticides
 and harmful chemicals;
thus
, they can be lived many years with
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle rather than metropolitan humans.
Furthermore
, there are more spacious houses are available in
village
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the village
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 venue,
in contrast
, urban
location
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 has
not
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 have more specious houses due to the population.
For instance
, cities only have huge building
apartment
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apartments
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instead
 of single homes. To conclude, education, employment and entertainment amenities are available tremendously in urban areas as compared to rural places,
hence
, many folks are migrating from
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the village
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village
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villages
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.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement in the above-mentioned details.
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