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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers,particularly in secondary schools. What are the reason for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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Currently, schools , secondary ones ,
in particular
, suffer from a dearth of
teachers
 as more and more
people
 do not seriously consider teaching as a career. In
this
 essay, low pay and a burden of the
work
 are to blame to have
this
 issue and a pay rise along with the appointment of teaching assistants will be given as the ways out. Let's begin by specifying the major causes of the argument.
First
 of all, there is no adequate salary for
teachers
 even though they always
work
 around the clock. Compared to many other jobs,
teachers
 are paid less competitive wages.
Therefore
,
people
 mostly look for more lucrative jobs.
Moreover
, it is not just about the money. Teaching us so high demanding process that
teachers
 always have the pressure at
work
. What I mean by
this
 is that
teachers
 have to retain their
work
 and family in balance simultaneously. But there may be a big obstacle to distract them which is the responsibility of paperwork completion.
As a result
, stress always follows them.
Thus
, most
people
 try to get an easier and less stressful option. Turning to the key to sorting
this
 problem out, at
first
, an amount of salary for
teachers
 should be boosted.
This
 approach may challenge more
people
 to be involved in working for education.
Furthermore
, the government should launch the school policy to employ teaching assistants in order to diminish the rate of burden and stress at
work
.
Also
, it can attract would-be specialists who will consider a teaching process easier. Summing up,
although
 the issue is serious with low salary and a lot of
work
 burdens, the answer can arise in rising a payment at schools and hiring assistants for teaching.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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