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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There are some
people
 who think that advertisement format and creation are one of the vital parts of them to make the decision to buy or not. But,
also
 there have other
people
 who think advertising has appeared since a few decades ago, no one is still concerned about the content in
advertisements
. In the following, I will discuss both points of view and give my own opinion. Advertising is the power tool for the company to promote their newest
product
. An interesting advertisement can catch the eyeball of
people
. Let more
people
 know the
product
, company, and bring them curious to want to know more information about your other
product
. The aim is to show your
product
 or service perfectly within one minute.
Then
, a successful presentation can impress customers in a certain way to spend money.
However
, there are some
people
 who believe the content in
advertisements
 is likely the same. Every company want to show their best to gain money from
people
 wallet. So that,
people
 start to lose confidence in any advertisement because it only presents the perfect side but it is not real and practical. Customers found that some products are not the same description when they are on TV or in newspapers. In the end,
people
 start to stop believing in
advertisements
. In my opinion, I think some companies have put a lot of effort and money into the marketing strategy. And those skills become more interesting and creative than before. There are not only put
advertisements
 on television, bus or some public area but
also
 utilize different platforms to promote their
product
such
 as social media like Youtube. For me, I feel enjoy watching the video on Youtube about sharing their after-use feeling. It is helpful for me to the real reflection of different users.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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