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Despite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle a gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest

#gyms #lifestyle #popularity #world
Nowadays, despite different
gyms
are
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establishing
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for
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improve
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people
's health in our country , our way of life is becoming increasingly rigid and
this
 is causing many problems.In my outlook , the
first
 reason is time .As the world becomes more and more
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, more and more
labor
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 is required of us , and
people
 are less and less able to engage
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en
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 sports.
On the other hand
, we can
also
 cause
people
's indifference .They prefer to spend their free time on useless activities rather than playing sports. In
fact
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 the biggest problem is in the
people
 themselves. In order to solve these problems, I think it is necessary to arouse
people
 's interest in sports and create conditions for them to want to relax in
gyms
 , not at home
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 when they are tired of work.
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, it is more important for
people
 to benefit than have more
gyms
, so it is important to create modern
gyms
 that are comfortable for modern
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • health problems
  • weight gain
  • obesity
  • energy levels
  • chronic illnesses
  • mental health
  • productivity
  • focus
  • social isolation
  • exercise
  • physical fitness
  • active lifestyle
  • health benefits
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • leisure activities
  • regular physical activity
  • physical exercise
  • cardiovascular health
  • strength training
  • flexibility
  • endurance
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