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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem?

#threats #environment
It is undeniable that
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 global warming is one of the biggest
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 which creates a lot
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problems
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 and put a negative impact on
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our environment so that's why there are some possible solutions to mitigate
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 troubles which I will
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discuss
 in my upcoming paragraphs. To address with ,
firstly
, in
this
 pace of life , the trend of
population
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are
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 increased day by day where masses cut the trees just to built the new houses which
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 put bad impact
onatmosphere
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atmosphere
on atmosphere
 because the level of carbon dioxide
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 inclined where
people
 suffer from breathing problems
secondly
 ,
lot
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 of factories are constructed which is
creats
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creates
 many harmful gases as well as different types of pollution
such
 as air pollution and water pollution which may
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cause
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the cause
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 of health diseases
thirdly
,
people
use
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 of natural resources
such
 as fuel ,coal which is declined
nowdays
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 just to
overuseage
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overuse
for instance
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nowdays
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,
people
use
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 own
vechile
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vehicle
 which
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 cause of declined natural resource like fuel and creates harmful effects.
However
 , on the other side , there are some measures to overcome that
issue
 the
first
 and foremost , the main responsibility of government to encourage
people
 about the planting more and more trees just for
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 or fresh atmosphere and
also
 bann
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on the
 cutting trees
inspite
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in spite
 of
this
 , they should
organised
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 various
saminars
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seminars
 and camps just to aware youth about the importance of natural resources because they
use
 resources at peak level
moreover
, they should
use
 electrical
vechiles
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vehicles
 which is safe for good environment
lastly
 , they should
use
 renewable energy
instead
 of fossil fuels. To conclude ,
nodoubt
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no doubt
 , global warming is one of the biggest
issue
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issues
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 which creates
a
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many problems
sothat
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so that
that
 why
government
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 should take some steps regarding
this
issue
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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