Some people sat that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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to bring the

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of individuals from various

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and ages together

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to unite

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is the thing that unties

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because is not just a bunch of words or in but a feeling for most

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express

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feeling in form of

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if someone hears a sad song related

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life it can make them cry. Many

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express their love in form of

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due to which irrespective of what

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have a DJ or band all around the world. We can

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together.

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be seen that , a

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is the place which unites a

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of individual all around the world and

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attending them feel connected which

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other at a deep level. Many concerts have visitors from all around the

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present were enjoying with each other.

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concert had visitors from worldwide like USA,

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, UK and many more from the

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were. Once the performance started

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enjoying the

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with one other as if they

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. It was a great site to watch.In conclusion, we can agree that

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is not just

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words or instruments but a feeling which brings

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together irrespective

from

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where they

or

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what their age is.