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Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Despite the fact that nations, where
people
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work
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 for long hours, experience a successful economy,
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 commonly has some social disadvantages. I strongly agree with
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 statement as
people
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 that
work
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 a lot have less
time
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 available for being social with friends and family and less
time
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 for
leisure
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time
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 in general.
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,
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 that
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 most of the days do not have much
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 left to spend with their closest ones. They will have little
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 to catch up with their friends after
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 or talk about nonsense around the dinner table with their family members. Inevitably, these persons might be stressed and feel guilty for not being able to keep their relations with their loved ones through daily life.
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, young women building careers commonly struggle to spend
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 with their families.
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 makes them sad and makes them prone to early burnout.
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, when the person is at
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 many hours of the day,
leisure
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time
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 will be limited.
Leisure
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time
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 is important for
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 to recover and help
people
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 to come back to
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 with spirit and energy.
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, lack of
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 for non-
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-related activities might make the employees sad and unhappy which again will affect the social environment at
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. They simply do not feel for being social at
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, or they might
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 contribute to a bad working environment because they are always in a bad mood. To conclude,
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, states experience economically success as
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work
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 a lot, I strongly support the statement that
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 has negative social impacts because
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 have limited
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 available for being social with friends and family and little
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 left for
leisure
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 activities.
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