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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A growing body of research suggests there is a drastic growth in the termination of pregnancy among masses, leading to a trending subject
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 debatable. It is often argued that
abortion
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 shall be legalised, while some are in
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the opinion
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 that
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 is a wrong approach to terminate a formed
life
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. In my opinion, I believe in the latter view and people with that frame of mind shall be penalised.
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 with, there are several reasons for people to opt for feticide and think it shall be legalised.
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, unfavourable conditions are raised for couples to bring babies in the real world, which can be due to poor financial status. Another reason can be from the criminal case. Rape,
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, which is a common and deadly issue around the globe, adds to the majority of the cases of unwanted pregnancy, which leaves a person in dilemma for
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.
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, any form of
life
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 shall be more valued and any act of killing a
life
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 is illegal. It is clear that, if
abortion
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 is legalised,
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 the worth of
life
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 will be degraded which is against
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human rights. A key reason for
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 is that
,
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 no human
possess
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 a license to end a
life
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, which can be devastating to the human race. To cite an example, both men and woman ratio shall be balanced, while there are people with
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 of mind of growing their generation opt to kill the woman foetus before birth.
This
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 situation can be harmful not only to society but
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 to the whole world. In conclusion,
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 could not be the solution to any complications and shall be penalised. I believe that
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 human
life
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 shall be respected and is equally important to form a balanced society.
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