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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the ıssue of
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 exploratıon pave a way for enormous dılemma between people. One sıde consıder that thıs research completely wastes of money whıle another sıde belıeve ıt ıs sıgnıfıcant enhancement for
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 of human generatıon.
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 phenomenon has both positive sides
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 as giving hope to continue mankind on another planet in the
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 and negative sides
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 as funding much more essential fields
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 of
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exploration
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 by the top-tier government institutions. On the one hand, in the majority perspective, the country fund should be spent more
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on vital
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 events
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 as climate crisis, economical hardship of paupers to resolve. İn fact, equipment
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space
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exploration
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 as telescopes, satellites demand high-budget finance.
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,
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 financing may be utilized to overcome climate change that gives rise to the greenhouse effect and global warming.
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, a budget can be used to transition from fossil fuel-powered vehicles to biofuel-powered vehicles to diminish carbon dioxide emissions which cause terrifying climate conditions.
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, the earth can become a more hospitable planet for human
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. Contrary to
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, some societies believe that
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exploration
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 is quite considerable for scientific discoveries. In these people view, thanks to
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 analysis, scientists can analyze hospitable zones and they discover recent exoplanets
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 as dwarf or giant planets for the
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 of a human generation.
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, these examinations light the way for researching extraterrestrial
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 forms and they assist to prevent potential
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-threatening events in the universe. The Project of
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 on Mars
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 predicted to fulfil in the
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by
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Elon Musk is an unparalleled example fort his complication. If the world destroys in the
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 due to any reason,
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 project presents new
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 for civilizations.
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, the human race can continue its
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 on another planet thanks to these studies in the event of a possible catastrophe. To sum up, in my own vision, the fundings that invest in
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exploration
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 are definitely substantial even demand an increasing number of investments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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