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Many people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

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Nowadays, there has been rising concern that staying at
house
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 or leaving it may cause doubts about security. In
this
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of
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such
opinion
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an opinion
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 and try to find
solution
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a solution
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. One of the main reasons is a lack of awareness about viruses, especially coronavirus COVID-19. Reading different media sources,
people
 may gain phobias
which
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 are connected with mutations of
this
 virus or other illnesses.
For instance
, some celebrities and bloggers have triggered a lot of conspiracy theories about
interests
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 of masons or governments to reduce
human
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the human
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 population using
biolaboratories
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laboratories
bio laboratories
 creating new mortal viruses.
Such
fallacy
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 may lead to
fail
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 in efforts to end or stabilize spreading COVID-19 and to rise in victims. Being under pressure of that information, citizens are enforced to find
the
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ways how to survive in current circumstances and to worry about themselves.
However
, there are several solutions to deal with
this
 issue.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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 should provide
population
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the population
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 with accessible data gained by researches. In current time, a bulk of
people
 consume entertained content,
therefore
 the most respectful and clear-headed stars can be attracted to enlighten campaigns.
Secondly
, levelling education in biology
also
 assist to reduce doubts
in
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 vaccines and treatments. Having
low level
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knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 in medicine,
people
 are vulnerable
for
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to
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 wrong information.
Finally
, authorities should take preventive measures against famous persons who distribute disinformation. Bloggers have to understand that their statements may lead to irreparable consequences. In conclusion, being
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 from
low
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the low
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 level of education, lack of information and actions of unscrupulous famous individuals,
people
 have started to worry about their security. In order to cope with
this
,
government
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the government
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 should
make
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take
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 some steps.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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