some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. others,however, believe that school is the place to learn this . discuss both views and give your opinion .
Many
people
believe that teacher
should teach the Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
children
to be a great person
in Fix the agreement mistake
people
the
society, Correct article usage
apply
however
, others think it is the parents
responsibility to teach their Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
children
social manners
. In my opinion, I believe that parents
should take fully responsible of
Change preposition
for
this
matter as school
Correct article usage
the school
principle
is Correct your spelling
principal
education
.
Nowadays, most children
are concerntrate
of study, which higher Correct your spelling
concentrate
concentrated
education
could bring them have
a bright future. Many students are studying very hard every day and they Add the particle
to have
Correct your spelling
do
don
not have time to learn Correct your spelling
do
social
lifeChange preposition
about social
,
because Remove the comma
apply
parents
think well education
could let the kids to
live better after they left Change the verb form
apply
school
. For instance
, some teenagers are so rude with
others in the community, and they Change preposition
to
Correct your spelling
do
don
not have any common Correct your spelling
do
sence
of social life, Correct your spelling
sense
by
contrast
Add the comma(s)
,contrast
people
graduated from University and work as a profestional
Correct your spelling
professional
person
, but with no care and Fix the agreement mistake
people
manners
with elderly people
, because they did not learn any of these at school
.
Teaching children
individual manners
, ability, and behavior
are Change the spelling
behaviour
parents
job, which Correct article usage
the parents
parents
have more social time with their kids. For example
, if a mother bring
their kids to the supermarket and they see Change the verb form
brings
a
old Correct article usage
apply
people
carry
lots of stuff. So, the mum should help tell her son/Wrong verb form
carrying
daugher
to help the elderly Correct your spelling
daughter
person
. Therefore
, the children
can learn to be a carer person
in the comminity
and help each Correct your spelling
community
others
when it Change to a singular noun
other
need
.
In summary, I strongly agree Change the verb form
needs
parents
should take fully responsible for children
social life manners
, ability and behavior
in Change the spelling
behaviour
the
society. Eventually, Correct article usage
apply
school
teachers has
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have
other enormous task
, which they need to teach Change the wording
another enormous task
other enormous tasks
children
to learn all education
subjects to help them for the future occupation and the country economic
.Replace the word
economy
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