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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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Some individuals say that reading books for enjoyment by the countless
child
 had drastically dropped.
This
 is all because of the internet and to let
children
 read more books is only possible if their
parents
 and teachers tell them the positive side of reading from the
book
.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, talking about the reason, the biggest thing is nowadays
children
 are getting attached with mobile
phones
 and the internet that makes them more addicted towards that and while using that
children
 do many thinks, which indirectly snitch their focus. Because
parents
 are busier due to their hectic schedule and they give their
phones
 to
children
 wherever they asked, that ways adolescents be more addicted.
For instance
, in every corner of the
,
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world if their
child
 asks to play or walk with them,
parents
 always give
phones
 for games and youtube and they don't even tell them to use
it
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them
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 for reading or scold them while they play games. Encouraging
children
 to read a
book
 is not an easy task but there are ways like
parents
 should tell their loved one's about books and why is it helpful in their carrier and what are the positive sides of particularly reading a
book
.
Secondly
, fins their interest which directly encourage a
child
, so that thing comes as a handy for
parents
. The most vital way is to spare time while reading with them which makes more sense than anything. To conclude, reading a
book
 is declined because of many reasons like phone, internet, and
parents
' tight schedule but to encourage their
children
 to read a
book
 is possible if
parents
 should guide and motivate them and do reading and stop using their
phones
 while their
child
 is reading.
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