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Band 5

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading things.Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.give your opinion

It is considered by some that advertising plays an important role in convincing
people
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 to
purchase
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 items while there are others who think that
people
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 are not even conscious about advertisements.Because of their ordinary nature.In my opinion,I believe that advertising is the most efficient way for
companies
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 to sell their goods. On the one hand,in
contemparary
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contemporary
 society, marketing
companies
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 use a variety of techniques to attract
customers
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 in order to improve their sales and
also
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 to create a production demand.Some of these strategies are
irresestiblein
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irresistible
irresistible in
 nature
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 as offers and discounts.
Moreover
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,Advertising
companies
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 have gone beyond using traditional ways of marketing to online.
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,most of the
companies
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 use
customer's
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customers'
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 search history on the inter aye to obtain data about their interest and needs.So that they can display ads about appealing products to
customers
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.These new approaches have increased sales over the years.
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,Ut is evident that
role
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 of advertising in persuading
customers
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 to
purchase
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 things is fruitful.
On the other hand
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,
customers
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 are more aware of the nature of advertising,and they tend to ignore them even though they are made to attract consumers.
People
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 are financially educated enough to do a background search prior to
buy
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 a certain product if it fits the budget rather than falling
in to
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 buying because of an attractive advertisement. For an instance,
people
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 not only skip online ads but
also
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purchase
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 premium
version
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versions
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 just to avoid advertisements.
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, in my
opinion
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 advertising still plays a major role in increasing sales of
companies
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.Annual budget allocation of
companies
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 for it indicates the success rate
if
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of
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advertising
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 in convincing
public
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the public
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 to
purchase
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 their products. To conclude,most
people
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 tend to buy items because of the power of advertisements
where
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whereas
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as
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apply
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only a few fake no notice of them.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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