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International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantages of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages?

#travel #countries #doors #tourist #tourists
Now a days
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, most
of
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people
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the people
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 like to go on an
tones
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. As international travel agencies providing low charges for travelling the many
people
 would like to go on tour. In my opinion,
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the international commuters will have
the
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more benefits. In today’s generation, many
people
 show much interest in travelling and
moreover
 most of
countries
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the countries
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 allows international travellers. Because from the international tourists will have come they will explore the
country
.
Hence
 the economy of the
country
 will
increase
 as well as the culture and heritage of
country
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the country
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 will get
the
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popularity.
In addition
 to
this
, they
many
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 visit the historic places will get to know about the
country
’s history. Daily wages earner will get beneficial. To the ones who can’t afford to go on
trips
 by the low fares they easily can manage to go on
trips
.
Beside
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this
, many
people
 have to go on regular business
trips
 they can easily manage their
trips
 it travelling cost is low. As well as, it had some drawbacks too.
Such
 that as tourists
increase
their
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 had
a higher chances
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a higher chance
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 of
increase
 in pollution. Their visiting
to
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the
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public places and parks may cause the parks very unhygienic. Because where the places had the more crowed automatically leads to the pollution. To conclude that, visiting of international commuters to the
country
 gives rise to
increase
 in countries economy and hag many benefits.
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