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set of courses provides one with an invaluable addi6on to a

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and puts her/him in the forefront of the field, paving the path to working in prominent companies or star6ng new businesses. I am very hopeful to be a part of

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program, collabora6ng with the students there, contribu6ng to the research done by the men6oned professors, and hopefully forming and

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in the

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program doesn’t come merely from my interest. I have obtained a good understanding of

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and management

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aRer studying in two of the finest universi6es in Iran and working in

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for 9 years. Working in

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division of MTN Irancell, the biggest

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operator in Iran

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provided the opportunity for me to gain the needed capabili6es like

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valida6on, systemic and strategic thinking, and risk management. I played an instrumental role in coming up

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implemen6ng the BTS rollout procedure which reduced the dura6on of site built by 30%, increased the earnings, and resulted in receiving monthly revenues 10 days earlier each month. More recently, I joined the first Neo digital bank in Iran, blu, as a project manager which provided me with

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the chance to experience a fast-paced start-up environment and approach problems from an entrepreneurial lens and a holis6c perspec6ve. Earlier, I had the chance to study “C++ programming”, “

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person and have the passion to become more and more successful in my job

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.

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necessary skills rapidly. The

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program by providing a

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knowledgeable professors and colleagues, helps me deepen my knowledge of “Informa6on Technology Management”, enhances my skills as a manager and researcher, and hopefully prepares me for a

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in my field of interest. I believe studying at

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Ryerson University is exci6ng, is a unique and challenging opportunity, and adds much meaning to the life of anyone who wins it. I wish I can be the one.