Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

For many centuries, humanities have the desire to indicate how successful they are in their own kind by using various indicators, and they try to figure the accuracy

one

Use synonyms

to indicate

success

Use synonyms

. Many are of the opinion that

monetary

Replace the word

money

show examples

is a better indicator while

others

Use synonyms

disagree. I agree to a certain extent,

however

Linking Words

, there are some issues to consider. Both sides along with my perspective linked to

this

Linking Words

topic will be outlined in the following paragraphs. There are many reasons why

people

Use synonyms

believed that

society

Use synonyms

people

Use synonyms

are more successful.

To begin

Linking Words

with,

one

Use synonyms

significant argument is that humans are social creatures by nature. While it may be correct that

money

Use synonyms

is really important in

this

Linking Words

recent world, it still appears to be the case that humans need to distribute something great to each

Use synonyms

others

Change to a singular noun

other

show examples

because they are

interdependence

Replace the word

interdependent

show examples

. To illustrate, the

last

Linking Words

few years have seen an increase in the number of billionaires, but there

are

Change the verb form

is

show examples

a large gap in

society

Use synonyms

lives

Use synonyms

between rich and poor, leading to the worst place for

this

Linking Words

world. Not only because

of

Change preposition

apply

show examples

human

Fix the agreement mistake

humans

show examples

should help each

Use synonyms

others

Change to a singular noun

other

show examples

but

also

Linking Words

because of contribute to

society

Use synonyms

is the true value of life. In many kinds of research, sharing is the primary key to

make

Wrong verb form

making

show examples

people

Use synonyms

better

Correct article usage

a better

show examples

life which, in

turm

Correct your spelling

turn

, might well result in a good relationship

to

Change preposition

with

show examples

one

Use synonyms

another and

successful

Replace the word

success

show examples

in living their

lives

Use synonyms

. Even though there are various reasons that contributing to

society

Use synonyms

should be the perfect indicators for

success

Use synonyms

, I hold the view that

ones

Correct pronoun usage

those

show examples

making a lot of

money

Use synonyms

are the most successful.

First

Linking Words

and foremost, the most important

one

Use synonyms

is that

monetary

Replace the word

money

show examples

is the common and acceptable way to exchange around the world. It is true that

money

Use synonyms

is created for the purpose of a middle indicator in exchanging some important products across the countries.

For example

Linking Words

,

people

Use synonyms

spend their

money

Use synonyms

to buy fundamental things in their

lives

Use synonyms

such

Linking Words

as homes, food, and clothes. Without

this

Linking Words

financial method, individuals would have a difficult situation to exchange things

to

Change preposition

with

show examples

another

Correct pronoun usage

others

show examples

, so, without a doubt, many citizens think that

people

Use synonyms

who have more

money

Use synonyms

have more

success

Use synonyms

.

Last

Linking Words

but not least, a

further

Linking Words

reason is that there

are

Change the verb form

is

show examples

no easy way to make a lot of

money

Use synonyms

without

disciplines

Fix the agreement mistake

discipline

show examples

and

diligent

Replace the word

diligence

show examples

.

This

Linking Words

is because most

of

Change preposition

apply

show examples

billionaires

Add an article

the billionaires

show examples

, especially young

Use synonyms

one

Correct pronoun usage

ones

show examples

, have to sacrifice their entertainment in childhood time to be diligent, be more

focus

Replace the word

focused

show examples

, and be

concentrate

Wrong verb form

concentrated

show examples

on their goals, achieving their

success

Use synonyms

. In conclusion, despite several detrimental aspects of

money

Use synonyms

to be

Change the verb form

being

show examples

the indicators of

success

Use synonyms

, in my point of view, beneficial aspects outweigh them. Unless humans have enough

money

Use synonyms

for their

lives

Use synonyms

first

Linking Words

, there is far less

likelihood

Replace the word

likely

show examples

that they will have resources to share more

to

Change preposition

with

show examples

others

Use synonyms

.