The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that the aver standard of an individual's well-being condition is likely to be less in the upcoming years as compared to the present. On the whole, I do agree with
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given statement to a great extent but in certain ,circumstances it is not valid which would be discussed in the following paragraphs with the relevant examples. Even though, medical science invented incredible machines and medicines round the clock to increase the
life
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expectancy of an individual.
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, the normal level of individual health conditions is likely to be Lower in future in comparison to now.Probably, the most prominent reason to believe
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is there is
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an extreme
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level of workplace stress in everyone's
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.
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. Everyone wants to earn more money to afford all luxuries of
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such
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as automatic cars and branded clothes. To meet the needs, they try to work overnight. Ultimately,
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action puts
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impact on
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employees'
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health in form of various diseases
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as diabetes, obesity and reduce health's condition.
In addition
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to it, every sphere of
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is changing and quality of
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the environment
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,
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the Food
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material is not an exception.
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of air, water, soil
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deteriorating every single day. Even the food we eat contains a lot of chemicals, pesticides and full of impurities which
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consequently
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capable of making us sick. It
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make
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us prone to different diseases
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as asthma, cancer and liver problems .
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, Delhi is
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the most
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polluted city in
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India and
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the average
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life
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expectancy of Delhi's people is lower than
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the rest
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of the world. To conclude,
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medical advancements are proven to be
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a boon
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for humanity
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somewhere they are unable to combat the negative effects of other factors like
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work-life
work life
stress and
environment
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pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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