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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is commonly believed that offenders ought to be utilized in community services
instead
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are sentenced
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 the imprisonment. In my own perspective,
this
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 phenomenon may be used by top-tier government municipalities because they reintegrate these people back into society.
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,
this
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 implementation may pose a threat
for
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life
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 of society because of repeated
criminals
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. On the one hand,
criminals
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 who
are sentenced
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have sentenced
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 the minor offences
such
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 as shoplifting, traffic offence, pickpocketing can be worked in a
free way
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 in community services. In fact,
this
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 situation
assist
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 them to reintegrate back into
societies
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society
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 and
adjust
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 their psychologies. Because in
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this
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 tasks, they can have opportunities to
grasped
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 the importance of
moral-responsibility
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moral responsibility
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. England and Wales are
unparalleled
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an unparalleled
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example
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for
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this
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 complication. In recent years in these couple countries, the vast majority of sentences are non-custodial.
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, thanks to
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 opportunity a plethora of offenders have been properly reintegrated back
society
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.
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, serious
criminals
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such
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 as murderers who were
serve
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served
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 a prison sentence for premeditated murder, human
trafficers
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traffickers
 can pose a danger for folk if they achieve
escaping
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 under the observation.
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, repeated
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 or serial
criminals
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whose
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 are improbable to rehabilitate themselves may be continued break the laws.
For
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instance
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 Anar Mammadov who is Azerbaijanian serial
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criminals
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criminal
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 killed a young girl after
release
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her release
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 on parole because she cry at the tram.
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, as
this
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that
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,
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criminals
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 are imposed community services may be hazardous for other people. To
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summerize
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summarize
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,
although
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 I agree non-custodial sentences are
perfect
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 application,
it
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 should not be valid villain
criminals
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 due to life of other people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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