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What are the advantages and disadvantages if getting old

As
people
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 are getting older, they may acquire some benefits and face many problems.
This
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 essay will discuss some positive aspects of being an elderly
person
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such
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 as having much knowledge acquired from their living time and freedom from working and some drawbacks of that including health issues and difficulty in communication. On the one hand, getting older allows
people
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 to have some benefits.
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, over the course of their living, a
person
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 can acquire many experiences of life, so they can share that with younger
people
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.
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, they receive respect from the younger generation.
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, as the majority of
people
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 spend much of their adulthood working, they save enough money to no longer need to be employed at the age of retirement.
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, an old
person
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 only needs to focus on their well-being without the worry of a financial burden.
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, in Japan, many young
people
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 invest their money in stocks, shares, and other financial assets using their salary; for
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 reason, these investments will create a passive income that pays for the period of their retirement.
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, an old
person
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 has to face some negativities.
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 of all, while they might have money to pay for their well-being, an ageing body can bring many diseases, including diabetes and cancers that decrease their life expectancy.
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, due to a generation gap, they will have a hard time sharing ideas and values with other younger
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.
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, miss understanding might grow between family's members that bring sadness to an elder that can impact their well-being.
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, old
people
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 in the U.S are usually living apart from their children since they can not share the same view about life; eventually, most of them have to die alone. In conclusion, getting older give old
people
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 respects from the younger generation and the freedom of retirement;
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, it brings problems to their health and communication issues among family members.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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