Why local people do not visit the historical site and museums. Discuss the reasons and give a solution to this problem.

After the massive innovation in all technological aspects ,especially social media and many applications have appeared nowadays , so from its demerits made a lack of culture and
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knowledge
for nations and a plethora of
people
do not keen to
visit
the
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historical
places
. In the coming few paragraphs the
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major
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solutions will be
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discussed
clearly.
First
of all, the high progress in telecommunication methods made civilians not have to
visit
any old
places
as the information has
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easily
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to find through the internet.
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there
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a myriad of movies which
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about interesting events and
places
.
For instance
,
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documentary
movies
such
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all describe the important events and
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in
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.What can be said
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we do not have to go far to
visit
museums or any old
places
as we can watch it or get through it by Internet or Television
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On the other hand
, Governments should enhance local
people
's
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awareness
about the importance of visiting museums.
Moreover
,parents and teachers must teach the youth how to enhance
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their
general information. As well as,
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people
should make
advertisments
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advertisements
about
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their
country's historical
places
to encourage
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their
the
nation to
visit
it .
For example
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must make free trips to famous historical sites in order to make our
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children
and teenagers know about the
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value
of
thier
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their
nation's history.
Also
,governments should make offers for local
people
to
visit
old
places
. In conclusion,visiting museums and historical sites is a major activity for
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strengthen
our mentality and to learn from the old nations how
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they think?.
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