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Crime ratio is increasing day by day in some parts of the world . What could be done to solve in

#crime #ratio #parts #world
Violation percentages are inclining on daily basis in
few
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area
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 of the
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. Based on some rational grounds the given problem has been
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 but there are ways to solve it. On the one hand, no doubt crimes are growing more as compared to the past
on
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 both developed and undeveloped countries.
Firstly
, poverty is one of the major
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of
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 crimes. As we know that the financial crises all around the world increased the rate of unemployment, which
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effects
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 most of the population and they lost
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 jobs. So the
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 of jobs tend a person to enter in illegal activities, where they easily earn more funds in very short times.
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,
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injustice is
also
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of
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 offence. While
,
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 government
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, as well as judicial system,
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judicial
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 system failed to provide
justice
 to innocents ,
then
 it give reasons to
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 that they took
illegal
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an illegal
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way
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 to reach
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in
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injustice
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justice
,
in
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which are raise the ratio of
unlawful
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an unlawful
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act
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. Now there are solutions for
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 causes as well.
Firstly
, authorities should
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 more jobs for
peoples
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people
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 along which possibles by installing more industries as well as vacancies. when more and more opportunities raise
then
 they directly decline
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the numbers
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 of faults.
On the other hand
, administrations should focus on
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justice
 to provide
justice
 on time and free of costs.
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