Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. Demand :- To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Intro :- Transportation of every country should b improved. Authorities should use the budget on
railways
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as compared to
roads
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. The given statement is partially agreed
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On the one hand, investment funds on
railways
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are very important.
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,
railways
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play a vast role in
country
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economy.
Railways
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are one of the safe modes of transportation in which the rate of accidents is far low, while most of the developing countries
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enough budgets on
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,
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because its help in
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growth .
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, its cheaps for passengers as compared to other traffic as well as use for delivering of goods. Most of the industries instruments and artillery
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through
railways
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in which they shift from one part of the country to another part in a very short time and less price.
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, it has some disadvantages of investing enough finance on
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roads
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are a fast system of travelling. We can move from our location to nearby areas by very short routes. While
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in
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we can't take a shortcut because they have
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a specific
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track. By ,
road
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the road
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we can make
schedule
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a schedule
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on own choice along with
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stop for refreshment purpose.
Roads
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are easily accessible for every individual. whereas the car may traveller enter into major
roads
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quite normal. every type of shipment has the right of
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