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some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. how might having a lot of money make people happy? what other things in life can make people happy?

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Money
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 is an fundamental tool that can give access to a lot of
things
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 in
people
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's
life
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. Some
people
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 believe that the major way to live an happy
life
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 is to hold a ton of
money
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.
This
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 essay will discuss how might having a lot of
money
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 can make
people
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 happy and what are the other
things
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 that one can enjoy in
life
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 other than just having
money
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.
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 with, Majority of the
people
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 work day in day out is just to get home some or other form of
money
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. Family is the most important part of everyone's
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 and to make their family happy,
people
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 need
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 currency in any form. Having lot of
money
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 opens doors to a variety of resources and opportunities, like buying expensive house or living a lavish lifestyle. To cite an example, a wealthy person can buy any kind of gift for their loved ones on special occasions irrespective of the price tag.
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 is one of the way
money
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 helps make
people
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 happy.
On the other hand
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, There are few
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 that
money
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 cant buy but makes
people
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 happy, few of those
things
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 are:
Time
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, exercise, talent.
People
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 who have
time
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 can explore a wide range of activities that can make them happy
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 as going on a trek can be adventureous and thrilling to some of
people
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. talent is something that comes by working and building a certain skill, it takes
time
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 to build but once its built, it makes
people
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 happy that they achieved what they wanted.
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, a person who exercises daily have a fit body and will live far more happier in long term as opposed to a person who just buy materialistic
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 and have unfit body. So, in a nutshell, according to the arguments aforementioned above, it can be clearly said that living a happy
life
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 dosen't need only
money
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. There are other
things
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such
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 as: exercising, playing games, spending quality
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 with family.
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money
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 can opens a few more doors to chances that one can take at being stable in
life
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, but
people
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 could still live happily with limited chances that they get.
Submitted by Mats Hummles on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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