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Many people are opting to buy second handed products instead of new ones. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Other than a traditional way of buying new things, the latest trend is to buy and sell pre-loved
items
. While purchasing
second
-handed
items
 save us money, we are
also
 saving the environment by reusing the
items
 that are still in good condition. Buying pre-loved
items
 do not make a hole in our wallets. We could not only get what we want in a good and usable condition
,
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 but
also
 get it at a much affordable price since they are not brand new goods. Recently, I came across a thrift store and found a handbag that I have been searching
for
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 a long time. It is no longer available in the retail shops as the overseas manufacturer does not produce the same design anymore. I bought that pre-loved bag at half the original price. Choosing to reuse whenever possible is a great move towards
the
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 greener earth. It eliminates the need to burn unwanted
items
 which contribute to global warming.
For example
, we have seen huge piles of trash in the documentary which are made of
litter
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 as well as unwanted
items
. If we could reuse those clothing and
items
 that are still in good condition, we could decrease the size of trash piles, which, in turn, will reduce the amount of CO2 produced by the burn. To sum up, opting to use
second
-handed products allow us to buy things we want at a much cheaper price.
Moreover
,
this
 move could slow down the rate of global warming without us putting effort into it. For these reasons, it is definitely a positive development.
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