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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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numerous
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museums and
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galleries
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 in
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 world whilst some have lodge
entry
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fees
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 and some are not having any admission
fees
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 . I ponder that having
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entry fees
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entry
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fees
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 in these infrastructures may have more advantages than disadvantages. To commence with the myriad reasons
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why museums and
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galleries
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 charges on admission. Primarily, in these types of public places, numbers of
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visting
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visiting
 there not only for entertainment but
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 to increase their knowledge as well as these famous
galleries
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also
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 act as
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 for international
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, so having
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entry
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 fee from the foreigner
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 help in burgeoning the economy of a country.
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 , the famous building in
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 known as 'The Taj Mahal' in which various
people
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 from another country have been visited to see their different work of
art
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 , which
infact
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in fact
 help in boost the gross domestic product.
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lodging
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a
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entry
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fees
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 in
art
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galleries
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 may lead to less crowding which
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 of
artifacts
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artefacts
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 as only
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interested
people
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 will pay
entry
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 fee rather than non-
intersted
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interested
people
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.
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,
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 ought to obey the rules and regulations and there will be more discipline among
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 and adults. Even though, the amount collected from
entry
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 could be used in maintenance and improvement of museums and
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galleries
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.
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, many reports illustrate that most of the charge
meuseum
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museum
 in Delhi are well conserved and
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 a better experience. To conclude, from the
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 reasons that charge on
entry
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 fee having
innumberable
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innumerable
 advantages like help in boosting country economy,
maintances
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maintenance
 of discipline and collected money will be used in renovations .
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