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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The plans illustrate southwest
airport
 now and after
development
 in a year. Overall, after the
development
, the new
facilities
 and new
gates
 will be constructed to receive much more
passengers
. Looking at the map in more detail, the number of
gates
 is eight,
however
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 it will be increased to 18, and it will be shaped like the capital "Y".
Also
, for transportation, the walkway will be replaced by a new sky train, and
in
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at
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 the departures
site
Correct your spelling
side
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 of the
airport
, new
shops
 will be constructed near the security. there will be new
facilities
 at the entrance and exit of Southwest
airport
.
Firstly
,
in
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at
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 the departure
site
, the
cafe
 and check-in will be carried to the opposite side of where they are,
moreover
 a new bag drop is going to be built to the right of the
cafe
. There are no
shops
 or services, but after
development
, a new car hire, ATM, and
cafe
 for the
passengers
 in the arrivals
site
Correct your spelling
side
show examples
 of the
airport
. Overall, after the
development
, the new
facilities
 and new
gates
 will be constructed to receive much more
passengers
. Looking at the map in more detail, the number of
gates
 is eight,
however
Add the comma(s)
,however
show examples
 it will be increased to 18, and it will be shaped like the capital "Y".
Also
, for transportation, the walkway will be replaced by a new sky train, and
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the departures
site
Correct your spelling
side
show examples
 of the
airport
, new
shops
 will be constructed near the security. there will be new
facilities
 at the entrance and exit of Southwest
airport
.
Firstly
,
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 the departure
site
, the
cafe
 and check-in will be carried to the opposite side of where they are,
moreover
 a new bag drop is going to be built to the right of the
cafe
. There are no
shops
 or services, but after
development
, a new car hire, ATM, and
cafe
 for the
passengers
 in the arrivals
site
Correct your spelling
side
show examples
 of the
airport
.
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